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lingering thoughts Member
since 2003-05-03
Posts 70Illinois, USA |
Are second chances crazy am i losing my mind ? Maybe should I find a way out before we scream and shout that way noone will get hurt by the insanity of it all losing my way around im not sure how to stand my ground im used to giving it all but maybe this way i wont fall... should i dive right in? or test the water out I thought it was safe but no longer can i doubt the only way to learn is to make mistakes so why do i not know what to do with this little heartbreak im used to giving it all but maybe this way i wont fall... tell me what to do this way i can blame it on you searching for a way to change the little things you rearrange so should i listen to my instinct and not go with the flow instead of giving it all i should hold on before i fall... hey everyone! i took forever revising this one trying to make it somewhat better ...haha, i thought i would try to rhyme this time *look i just did*LOL so please respond and tell me your thoughts thanks a lot! *Cassandra |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Well! I have to say that the revising and editing payed off... this is probably the best of yours I've read. I hate you have to know how that feels... I'm kind of at that same place right now. Hope things start goin' better for you... Keep on writin'! -Lioness |
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Kaydo Junior Member
since 2003-06-02
Posts 17Washington, USA |
wow! I like how it all flows nicly together. I thought that it was a wonderful poem and I hope to read more like this form you. Great Job!!! |
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