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brezee
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since 2003-06-02
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0 posted 2003-06-02 10:08 PM


Wouldn't that be cool
If everyone could fly?
We would never need school
And we wouldn't ever die.

We could fly around day and night
Soaring up and down
Without having to feel the fright
Of the fears that lie on ground.

We would all be free
We could all enjoy life,
It would be cool to me
If we could all take flight.

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1 posted 2003-06-03 01:40 PM


*nods* A thought often captured in my mind during boredom. Imagine what the birds see... wouldn't it be great?

Thanks for the read. I hope to read more from you soon!

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

AlostHeart
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since 2003-05-01
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2 posted 2003-06-04 12:06 PM


ya umm ok.... what do you mean we would never have to go to school? what do you plan on doing?? and what do you mean you would never die?? WHAT IF YOU WERE HIT BY AN AIRPLANE!!!!!! j/k
           no seriously i have thought about that but mostley as a child. and it would me cool.
            ~Tori Louise~


Dont ever love a guy that will never love you back, no matter how hard you try.

[This message has been edited by AlostHeart (06-04-2003 12:21 PM).]

blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
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3 posted 2003-06-04 12:21 PM


Okay... sitting here trying to think what this poem means to me... and I'm being hit with feelings of "cute."

So yeah... I think it's cute. Very just... happy skippy free-flowing rhyme. A nice change from all the hard-core emotion floating around in here.

Nice job.

-Lioness

brezee
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4 posted 2003-06-04 12:44 PM


hey guys thanxs for your replies, Tori the part that says we'll never die means mostly die inside, like being down or depressed, and the school part well....lol i guess if you were younger and you didn't want to go to school, or anywhere for that matter, you wouldn't have to, you could just fly away.  thanx again, ~*~*brezee*~*~
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