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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-06-01 11:58 AM

..Take the time out and see..
..How hurtful your words are to me..

Can you see the pain you cause?
I don't know whats going on with you.
You don't need to point out my flaws,
Don't you see what you're putting me through?

I keep telling myself it'll be okay,
But somehow I can't block out what you say.

So....
Take the time out and see
How hurtful your words are to me.

Please just leave, just walk away.
Leave me here with my pain.
Watch my eyes turn from blue to gray,
And watch me go through torture again.

I keep telling myself it'll be okay,
But somehow I can't block out what you say.

So....
Take the time out and see
How hurtful your words are to me....

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

ljossberir
Member

since 2003-05-04

Posts 81
Ny, USA

1 posted 2003-06-01 12:46 PM

First poem on piptalk that brought tears to my eye, I identify. I rhyme too,apparently

It helps to express feelings like this, and you've done it in an excellent way - great rythm and style.
Great work + Hang in There

-matt

spritrider87
Member

since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

2 posted 2003-06-01 12:59 PM

i can totally relate to what you are saying i go through stuff like that everyday and it hurts. hang in there. i know im trying. if it gets to be to much talk to someone. it helps alot. see you around. *hugs*

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2003-06-01 01:08 PM

This was a good one! Sad, and I can relate. ~Jess

"If a thing is worth doing at all, it is worth doing badly." -Gustav Holst

lingering thoughts
Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 70
Illinois, USA

4 posted 2003-06-02 06:53 PM

i can relate to this poem which makes it even better...

i liked how you repeated a few lines throughout the poem and the rhyming was good too !
i hope you get through your situation !

xxshadowxx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-17

Posts 43
Texas

5 posted 2003-06-02 07:39 PM

WOW I'm speechless... That a really really good poem!!! And I love the way you wrote it!

~Carrie~

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

6 posted 2003-06-05 07:55 PM

Wow Stac...I can't say it enough...your poetry is SOOO beautiful! This just adds to my favorites of yours. Actually...all of yours are my favorites! LoL. Like I always say, and I'm going to say it once again...you never cease to amaze me! Nice job! Love's.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

7 posted 2003-06-08 09:04 PM

This was sad, but excellent! Keep posting, because I'll be looking for more of yours...good job! -Secret

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

8 posted 2003-06-08 09:14 PM

Thanks everyone, I'm glad you all liked this.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

9 posted 2003-06-08 09:37 PM

Oye, well, it's nice to see some posters more senior than myself still come around and post, even if every poem I end up seeing of your's is very sad. They're all very good, though, and this one is no exception! You always did write emotional poems, and I've liked them all.

Rich

Forever I will stand
always here with you.
Now stay and hold my hand
and together we'll go somewhere new.
~Rich~

infinite disaster
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 69
Illinois

10 posted 2003-06-08 09:39 PM

i really liked that poem. it was sad, but well written. keep up the good work. i'll look for more of ur stuff. i hope things turn out better.
much love, akie

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

11 posted 2003-06-08 09:40 PM

this is such an AMAZING piece of writing. You are a beautiful writer, and I must say (along with everyone else) that it truly brought tears to my eyes, and i can totally relate. Hopefully things get better for you... p.s. love stinks

-Erica-

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