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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2003-05-30 09:59 AM

I can’t sleep. I hear the cars on the wet highway.
Life doesn’t stop when your eyes are closed.
You are next to me. We are lying sideways,
With our legs and our destinies intercrossed.

I wonder if this is what love does for others,
If questioning love is an act of love on its own.
Is this why your hand gropes under the covers,
For my arm, to make certain you aren’t alone?

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

1 posted 2003-05-30 03:07 PM

I liked this alot...I liked the last stanza best! Pe@ce ~*Kirah*~

"Life is not measured by the moments we take,but by the moments that take our breaths away." -Author Unkown.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2003-05-30 03:18 PM

Master? I thought you were gone? this is great. i love it..........

are you back for good?

riley

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

3 posted 2003-05-30 03:46 PM

I'll pop in now and then to read and post some of my own stuff. I haven't been writing much lately, but whenever I do, I feel the need to share it. So yea, I'm back, but I doubt that I'll be posting as often as I used to. Thanks for reading!

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2003-05-30 03:49 PM

I agree with Riley. I haven't see you around here for awhile. But I liked this one a lot. Good job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

5 posted 2003-05-31 07:03 PM

Woah... nice. I haven't seen you here before... but it's great to meet you.

Very impressive...

-Lioness

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2003-06-03 01:04 PM

Very well done, Master! Geez, have I missed your poetry. This is the best poem I have read in Teen in a very long time. Thank you so much...

I loved your lines, and your ending, leaving the reading wanting more, but compensating with reading it again and again. Your thoughts become complex, but begin so simple. A common thought turned into a thinking game by just a couple of lines.

"You are next to me. We are lying sideways,
With our legs and our destinies intercrossed."

This image gave me shudders, being in this type of relationship myself. My favorite thing in finding his toes under the covers to reassure myself that I am not alone in our journey which you say with:

"Is this why your hand gropes under the covers,
For my arm, to make certain you aren’t alone?"

Indeed, this is why I do it.

This poem is awesome. It's going straight into my personal library. Please post more often? I've missed this mind stimulation!

Thanks for the great read.

Yours,
--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

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