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EleanorMoonbaby
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0 posted 2003-05-29 04:37 PM


Let me decorate myself for you
Become a fountain of my lifeforce
Spinning, leaving circles.

Let me perfect myself for you
Forming pools of flawless red
Like warped and angry stars.

Let me complete myself for you
Leave just a dried-out husk
So you can say goodbye.

I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged!

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1 posted 2003-05-29 05:26 PM


WoWiE, I liked this. Totally. Great job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

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2 posted 2003-06-03 12:49 PM


To change yourself for someone else prevents you from a world of happiness you could experience otherwise.

The format of this poem was awesome. It reads easily and it expresses what it needs to in a short, concise way.

I like this... Thanks for sharing.

--Marie

"You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life)

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