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*Dark Princess* Junior Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 22lost in the shadows |
My last ex broke up with me and wouldnt tell me waht was wrong so I felt so useless. I wanted to try to make it work, but I didnt know how because he wouldn't tell me anything...I'm kinda new at this... Sitting here in confusion, So deep. So dark. Not knowing... Why now? What went wrong? What can I do? Not knowing... I want to run away, I want to yell and scream, I really need to cry. Not knowing... Why did you do this? We couldve talked about it, We couldve worked things out. Not knowing... |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Welcome to Passions! If your ex didn't appreciate what he had with you and wasn't even willing to talk, then you really do deserve someone better, or at least more mature. Your poem was nicely expressed. Please check your email for a special message!  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
sigh..don't I know this feeling! My last guy did the same thing and I'm still healing from it. The poem itself was an excellent first post and may I be the first to welcome you to passions! You've expressed your emotions very well throughout the piece and the hurt and confusion stand out clear. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
Welcome to Passions!! I'm sorry about your situation. I've been there before and I know how much it hurts. The poem was pretty good, I felt the emotion though out the whole thing. I look forword to reading more from you. Jen Every oak tree started out as a couple of nuts who stood their |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to PIPtalk! It's great to have you here, new to poetry or not. This was a well-written poem. The subject content is complicated, I know, but hang in there, and things'll get better.  Just a thought - how about for a title "Not Knowing". The repitition works for a wonderful title and something to go by in writing the poem.Wonderful work. I can't wait to read more. --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Welcome to Passions! I'm so sorry you're going through that... my last two boyfriends did nearly the same thing to me. It's amazing how much it hurts. I was actually engaged to be engaged to the last guy... and he just... decided I wasn't good enough. I like your poem... great first post.  Hope things start goin' better for you soon... and if you need to vent or whine or just talk, this is an awesome place to do it. There are so many caring people here. -Lioness |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Welcome to Passions! This is a great start for you, I think! I think we all think!! You have launched yourself into our world of poetry in a way of which you should be proud Keep em coming...and welcome to our happy haven!Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
 Welcome to Passions!!I look forward to reading more of your poetry, and I hope that things work out for you *hugs* if you ever need a listening ear... er... eye... (it's all good) feel free to email me |
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