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HeroicVillan Junior Member
since 2002-11-09
Posts 34Lost..... |
What can make the world turn, and leave no spirit spared. Its not that we could never learn, only that we never cared. Didnt want the darkness to be bright, didnt want to feel control. Wanted only to regain the light, of our own immortal soul. What, we ask, is the cause of this? Why dont we even care? Is it waiting for the final kiss, of a death we all must share? Dreamed of what we thought was right, left behind our simple rolls. Sent them to flicker, in the night, shadows cast by smothered coals. |
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xxshadowxx Junior Member
since 2003-05-17
Posts 43Texas |
WOW.. that was really good i liked it alot!! good job ~Carrie~ "Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me" |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
That is quality poetry right there. That sounds kinda corny, but it's true. Keep up the good work.(jeez that sounds corny to LoL) take care, Jenni To hate you must first have loved. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
THis is really great! It comes across nicely to whoever is reading through it. It flows. Great work! Too strong to give up, to weak to move on.... |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Sometimes I read something that's so wonderfully written, I don't even notice it's about something... just how well it flows. I guess my biggest love in poetry is the rhyme and rhythm of it. Awesomeness... |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Just ignore this... I forgot to add this to my library. And I just HAD to. Sorry 'bout that...  |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
WOW! This was great...I absolutely LOVE it! Honestly..I'm practically speechless. Great job! ~Jess  "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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AlostHeart Member
since 2003-05-01
Posts 78Wisconsin, U.S. |
Great poem! Flows like a beaut!!! Keep it up. ~Tori Louise~ Dont ever love a guy that will never love you back, no matter how hard you try. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Yeah, what they all said and more Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Hey, they're right, it is really good! I'll look for more postings by you.  ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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