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blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

0 posted 2003-05-17 10:53 PM

Fourteen I sit,
Wishing I were five,
Dreaming of childhood,
When I was alive.

I’ve reached the climax.
The action has passed.
The storyline is almost over,
It went way too fast.

Knife to my wrist,
Not exactly sure why,
To release the pain?
Or intending to die?

I begin to slice,
And I still don’t know,
In what state I’ll be
At the end of the show.

Deeper I cut,
The red drips now stream,
I’m too afraid to keep quiet,
But too brave to scream.

My tears were once clear,
Now red with the blood,
I’m drowning in this
Sickening lifeless flood.

So I guess I’ve decided,
Or the hand with the knife has,
These uncontrollable sobs
Will soon be my last.

Well the sitcom is over,
The tears are shed,
The credits are rolling,
As I lie here dead.

Too late for apologies.
If you could only see
The constant sadness
You mounted on top of me.

So now I am gone.
I never saw the light.
The show has ended,
Goodbye and Goodnight.

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-05-17 11:43 PM

Oh my! Oh my! I cannot begin to describe how much I LOVE this poem. It makes me speechless..Great work! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

2 posted 2003-05-17 11:52 PM

Thanks a bunch... I like to hear when people enjoy my work

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

xxshadowxx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-17

Posts 43
Texas

3 posted 2003-05-18 02:43 PM

WOW that is a really really good poem keep up the good work!
Carrie

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

4 posted 2003-05-18 08:22 PM

Oh, wowww... nice!

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

5 posted 2003-08-17 10:09 PM

This poem was beyond amazing. It left me completely speechless. Beautiful write. Absolutely perfect.

"I would sleep forever, if it meant I'd never stop dreaming..."

magic_612
Member

since 2003-07-31

Posts 190
NB, Canada

6 posted 2003-08-18 10:39 AM

wow you really have a gift of writing, this poem was amazing.. Great job!!

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

7 posted 2003-08-20 11:34 AM

I liked this, but I don't know if the moderators will...It was descriptive, and it flowed well. Good job.

"It's the way that he makes you feel.
It's the way that he kisses you.
It's the way that he makes you fall in love"~Sugarcult

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

8 posted 2003-08-20 12:42 PM

I can honestly say that that was one of the best poems I have ever read in my entire life. I don't even know what else to say. This was an awesome write, and it's going in my library.

-Jen

"One's philosophy is not best expressed in words; it's expressed in the choices on makes." -Eleanor Roosevelt

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