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T-Bird
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0 posted 2003-07-10 01:45 PM


I don't think this is a very good one, but I decided to post it anyway. I wrote it a long time ago when i first started writing things.


Holes
During your life your will encounter many of them,
Because they are everywhere waiting for people.
Some you feel you connot get out of,
But somehow, someway you get out.
You keep going on, falling down, and getting up.
Sometimes you just wanna quit, and you do.
But that's where your friends come in.
They pull you out, and push you to go on.
They keep helping, and pushing you, even when you don't want them to.
So take the holes as they come and go, and deal with them the best you can.
But most of all remember your friends are there to guide you.



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1 posted 2003-07-10 10:52 PM


well I liked it!! I don't know about it being bad at all! It was a free verse poem and it could use a lil' work on the flow but I absolutly loved the message in it and for that I wouldn't change a single word. Nice jobb honey, enjoyable read
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2 posted 2003-07-12 02:44 AM


Heh very very true. Enjoyed the read

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