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Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2003-05-15 05:54 PM

I really struggled trying to put this one together, I guess that's vitrue of freeverse...it doesn't matter...anywhoo, be gentle.

The Gutter Boy

Belly down and defeated,
I'm scratching my horrid way along
the stinking, dirty curbside.
"O! Death bring me your sweet release"
I scream.
My blackened eyes gaze about for
any who hear my bloody cry.
Just as the azure beyond
couldn't be a fainter dream,
I hear my awaited response.
Another scream...
from the sickly gutter
in which lies my only hope.
He peers up at my
fortune through the sewage
with a wide eyed admiration
and longing that only the forgotten
can know.
I love him for being so wretched,
for I am not.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

[This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (05-15-2003 05:55 PM).]

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

1 posted 2003-05-15 06:50 PM

I loved the way this was done.

^~^If we cannot live so as to be happy, let us least live so as to deserve it.~*~
Immanuel Hermann Fichte

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2003-05-16 12:30 PM

jeremy that was awesome and deep. i really really really loved it.
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

3 posted 2003-05-20 02:45 PM

I'm really enjoying your poetry, as this one doesn't cease to impress me. Thanks for posting, I liked it.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

xxshadowxx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-17

Posts 43
Texas

4 posted 2003-05-20 07:03 PM

I loved the way it was written... great job!!
~*Carrie*~

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2003-05-20 07:24 PM

C'est une poésie vraiment grande. J'ai pensé la chose entière étais écrite vraiment bonne, vos poésies sont toujours ainsi feutre de coeur, le bon travail, et maintiennent le bon travail
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-05-20 08:14 PM

I had to read it twice to get the end, LoL, but once I did, I loved it. It's very well written. Thanks for posting.
Jenni

BTW, just as another word of praise, I haven't read anything by you that I haven't liked.

There are three kinds of people in this world, those who can count, and those who can't.

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