Teen Poetry #6 |
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Another manipulative fool |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I wrote this one yesterday in a bit of a rage...seeing much clearer now but still a little justly upset so I decided to post it. Last evil vindictive one towards ex's I swear!! You took my heart You don't care You took my soul You left me bare I feel the pain You feel nothing at all You havn't learned what a heart is for Around me I slowly build a wall You do not understand a person Cause you aren't one, it's true A person gives without taking The complete opposite is you The only one you care about Is the one right in front of your face When you look into the mirror You don't get to the inside, ugliness take place You're not the person I thought you were I know now the person you are Try to prove me wrong You won't get very far You're the evil behind true evil You're everything untrue You're gonna end up all alone With another manipulative fool like you Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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affectionately mine New Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 6Washington, US |
Wow that makes me think of a couple people i know. great expression and emotion heather. i think u are an awesome writer and you convey a lot of passion through all that you write. great job. honesty is the best thing to write about. stay sweet kid! "Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I get ya. Some men just need to be rmoved of their reason for a loin-cloth. lol j/k. I can totally relate to this one. I hope you feel better. Just remember that there are decent guys out there...somewhere. Jen To hate you must first have loved. |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey guys thanks for the replys! Amanda, could we possibly be thinking of the same people?..hehe...Broken dreams, I feel you..the key word there is somewhere...heh.. Anyways thanks for the comments they are always appreatiated and enjoyed. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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Song_for_Serenity Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97USA |
Ouch... well, I guess that I can see where both you and Amanda are/were coming from... |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
oh god this is such a GREAT poem! i couldnt describe how i feel any better than you just did....i have some hate poems too, let me know if you wanna read them, they are similar to this one...whoever your talking about doesnt deserve you, he does deserve what he is... this poem describes how i feel about my (Ex) boyfriend so well...thank you for sharing ![]() keep up the writing, im looking forward to reading more from you! -Ali- |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
oops. 4got to put it in my library |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Wow..it's back to haunt me!! hehe just kidding..thanks for the replys guys. Angela, I was going to say something that would make you feel better..but I'm just not in the nice kinda mood tonight so I'll just simply say that the poem wasn't really directed at you..even the last part. A.L..I may just take you up on that offer! I am tonz better about that whole situation now though and don't really have any problems with it anymore except on rare occasions. But Once again I'm rambling so anyhoo thanks for the comments ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome ending! Prevailing woman shows her strength... very strong. I enjoyed this. I hope you understand what a good thing this is, however. What if it lasted longer, and he hurt you even worse? Ah, well, wonderful read. It was inspiring.. thanks for that ![]() --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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chiquita New Member
since 2003-06-03
Posts 1 |
I realy liked your poem. It was powerful, and respectable. |
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