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snoduck
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since 2002-11-15
Posts 99
Selah, WA

0 posted 2003-05-12 11:53 PM



I don't belong
In this world of hate,
There is no need
For me
To have to suffer
Because I was put
DOWN
I was an accident
The accident that makes
My parents fight.

I'm the snake that
Slithers at night,
I'm the shadow
Walking beside you
On the cold, and
Empty street..
I only wanted
To be the rain, or
Color the flowers
That bloom each spring.
I didn't ask
To be brought into
My parents house,
To my parents life.
I'm a lost soul
Wandering.
God did something wrong,
I must have been
Misplaced.

© Copyright 2003 Erica Reeves - All Rights Reserved
teenpoet
Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280
Michigan
1 posted 2003-05-13 11:14 AM


Do you have any clue how often I feel like that?  Of course not, nut I feel like that an awful lot.  I hate and you know what he's not even my real father but it was the same with my real father.  Good poem, very good.

I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so.

Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-05-14 05:21 PM


Very good, very real and emotional. I loved this line:  I only wanted to be the rain, or color the flowers that bloom each spring.
I've never personally experienced hurt like this, but in this poem, you made me feel it.
~Lexy

Kandi
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
3 posted 2003-05-14 06:00 PM


Like Lexy, I can't relate personally, but I still really enjoyed this. You put your feelings and your pain across so honestly and effectively. Excellent work.

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

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