Teen Poetry #6 |
Then But Not Now |
PeaceInEverything Junior Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 31Ohio, United States |
I do not wish to post so soon after a post but I must.Otherwise I may convince myself to keep it inside and not let it out.Bottles of emotions stored in the celler will eventually crack and explode.So here are my emotions, my feelings, my pain, put into my poem.In hopes that sharing will be a relief. --Then But Not Now-- You say "Then I loved you", but not now. You say "Then was our time", but not now. You say "Then was your chance", but not now. Now is my grief. Now is my pain. Now is my torment. Now, is now my hell. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
"Now is now my hell." I like the redundance of "now." Made the ending stand out, and accentuated nicely how the "now" can change by circumstance. It's so nice to see an emotional vent that has a global application, like the one you added in the end. Very well done. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Ouch, even in it's simplicity I feel this. Hope you work it out. Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
short, powerful, and to the point. i like this poem thanks for the read |
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