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teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

0 posted 2003-05-06 11:16 AM

oh I know I seem so childish to you
Do you realize how old you seem to me
you are stuck in the same ways
immovable as a rock
You refuse to allow me to reach out to you
you refuse to live life
You hide away in your little world
that no one inhabits except you
I don't care that we aren't really blood
I just want to know you care
I know that I never said this
but I thought every daughter felt this way
I don't know why you never care
you ignore me, yell at me, ground me
but I don't think I've ever heard you say
I love you, you're a great kid
Do you realize how hard I would try
I'd get great grades and join sports and
Everything just to try to get you
to notice what I did
I used to do a lot for your approval
but you never came to my games or shows
Or concerts or honor meetings
You were never there and you always wanted more
I used to cry at night before I went to sleep
I've never admitted that to anyone
I just wanted you to love me
the way you love your own
my mom says you do and I try to believe
but it just doesn't seem possible
the way you are to me
but then again there are sometimes
once in a while
you seem to love me like you should
you say you're proud and ask me
To give you my trophies or medals
that I've just earned
Or you play around and joke with me
but that doesn't happen so often
And I've stopped trying now
I just can't understand
why you don't want to be my dad

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

1 posted 2003-05-06 07:38 PM

I think that is a really really good poem... I guess because I can kind of relate to it in a different way... but I like it a lot

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2003-05-07 02:28 PM

excellent, excellent, excellent!!!... this was soooooo indepth. you didn't leave out a thing and created a perfect view into exactly what you think and how you feel about this situation...it came full circle to the end and the last line was perfect...great job.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

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