Teen Poetry #6 |
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Eminem wanna be Member
since 2003-02-04
Posts 52Windsor, Missouri |
I'm all messed up right now things are going wrong and i don't know how My lil cuz lost her virginity at 13 I'm pissed at her but should i be so mean? My friend kayle is having family problems things that happen daily Then I got my own issue that cant be helped by them "What do I do?" I try to help my girls and they try to help me as our short life twirls.... I started drinkin when I was 12 years old to calm me down to keep that hold Kayle's blammed for being chooked DFS don't giva a **** they'd rather hear she croaked adults say we're important in this world but its all lies we all get hurled "Where do we stand if we're important?" Teacher says shut up and gives the hand....... I'm just getting thoughts out....the flow on this is wack but you know how it is when your emotions are all messed up.... You can do anything you set your mind to man--EMIN3M |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
yeah the rhyme scheme is a little "wacked" but I think it adds to the poem. I can feel the emotions all the way through...good write. oh and for a title...maybe Crazy Life...idk i'm not good with titles. Jenni To hate you must first have loved. [This message has been edited by BrokenDreams (05-05-2003 11:31 PM).] |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
it's ok let them emmotions out however you gotta do it. good poem. robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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Eminem wanna be Member
since 2003-02-04
Posts 52Windsor, Missouri |
thanks guys You can do anything you set your mind to man--EMIN3M |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
I know what you mean... I like the ideas in the poem... I know how it is... Life as a teenager... Things can be so out of control, and confusing... But the wording and rhyme in this poem could be better... but like you said, it's hard sometimes to put your complex thoughts into words when your "emotions are all messed up." I can really relate to this... |
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