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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2003-05-04 02:34 PM

The sky is crying tears of sorrow,
Soaking all her sons and daughters.
Her pain is wisdom to which we know
A pain too strong to let it go.

The drops fall harder against the ground;
All I can hear is the pounding sound
Of someone neglected for years and years,
Shielding themselves due to all their fears.

She lost her love, but is in denial...
She could not believe she could feel this hollow.
Her soul is gone to another place,
As the tears fall slowly down her face.

It goes on for hours, throughout the night
Until the sun comes into sight.
Till day has come and start anew
She calms her emotions, forgetting you.

Until night comes again...*

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-05-04 07:01 PM

You showed this to me the other night, but I figured I would reply anyway!

...This was a REALLY good one. I like, I like! hehe ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-05-04 09:05 PM

I like it and I know the feeling well. Good write.

Jen

To hate you must first have loved.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

3 posted 2003-05-05 06:38 AM

I liked this Jenn. But I have a very inquiring mind and would like to know about this in more detail....anyways, good job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

4 posted 2003-05-05 03:19 PM

Great poem! Very sad, I must say, but good work! Keep on writing!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

5 posted 2003-05-05 08:43 PM

Very nice poem! You read this to me over the phone one day...but I think it touches you more if you read it yourself. Either way...I like it. Really nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA