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Teen Poetry #6

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Danielle
Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 80
Providence, RI, USA

0 posted 2003-05-02 10:11 PM

Marriage and a child?
When will we be ready?
How long till we can handle what life throws?
When will be old enough to do the things we want?

So young and so in love...
Do you ever wonder if it's fate?
Is there ever a doubt in your mind?

At times I find myself scared
Unsure whether or not you'll leave me
I've done some much to hurt you
Yet you keep on loving me
I learned to look before I leap
No more being caught off gaurd

You are my life and my world
I am bettering myself for you
I want you to see me try, to see I really care for you

Blessed Be Those Who
Reads My Writing

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2003-05-06 11:13 AM

really apologetic sentiment...I'm sure whomever this is for really appreciated it.
got my vote...good job.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

2 posted 2003-06-22 12:32 PM

I'm not thrilled with this piece... I just read a poem by you about fate and this one too soon is repeating the thoughts of the last one. Although the poem is good. I just don't like reading 2 pieces of one authors so close to each other.

Love,
xXx~*KELLIE*~xXx
*My poetry website
http://www.freewebs.com/poettree/

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