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Teen Poetry #6

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SimpleDiscourse
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 79

0 posted 2003-04-30 10:28 PM

Ok, so I'm not really new my old username was stellarchica but I never liked that one so..I made a new one. Yes so onto my poem.

Life is so anticlimatic.
He mutters to himself
in a voice ridden with
contempt.
The last blaze of glory
from his nicotine torch
burns his fingertips.
Already burnt out.
Without him even taking
a single drag.
And he thinks to himself:
Irony? Hardly. Typical.
And so he throws
the night's one saving grace
to the ground.
Smothers its final embers.
Walks away.
Thinks:
Typical.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

1 posted 2003-05-01 03:05 AM

good poem i liked it.
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-05-02 09:46 PM

wow, I really like your style, it is very unique and thought provoking..I loved this part: "Irony? Hardly. Typical." And the last line; " he thinks: Typical." One of the exceptionally great pieces I've read recently, I'll be lookin' for more..
~lexy

[This message has been edited by Lexy (05-02-2003 09:48 PM).]

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

3 posted 2003-05-03 06:54 PM

Flows very nicely...

I like how you put his thoughts into it.

Really great...

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