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My Journey |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
On this journey I was walking Unsuspecting, laughing, talking Thinking that the road ahead Would go along until it's end Which somewhere in the future lay Somewhere very far away This night the sky was dark as death Across the plain a foul wind swept No moon, no stars, no light at all The only sound a desolate call Of some other creature lost in the night Consumed by darkness, pain and fright Every step I took seemed further away From end to darkness, sunlight, day So black I could not see to step I thought perhaps I'd missed my path But on I went, unsure, afraid 'Till something in my pathway lay It seemed to be a post. A sign. If I could only see the lines Inscribed upon it, perhaps it could Show me where I was and would... And then out of the blinding night Came a tiny gleam of light Traveling over the words that said "One way to love, and one to death." These cryptic words did not make sense Until I took a step ahead A wall in front of me that stopped My way was barred, prevented, blocked Could not go back, not turn around And yet ahead, no way was found The sign once pointed right and left But with it's falling, help it kept Only there to make me fear One wrong choice would lead me here For I decided, went on my way Night once again turned dismal day I still don't know what road I'm on To love, or death, or both, or none My decision based upon the thought That if I went to death, to nought I'd simply travel on to end A world without love, without friends Yet without heartache, shame, and hate An empty life, yet planned and safe And if I went the way of love Still it would lead on to my grave I can't decide which one I want Not that it matters - one I've got But if this road does lead to death And not to life before last breath Then who's that stranger standing there Watching me... as if he cared? |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
WOW!!!! I haven't read alot of your work, so don't a basis of comparison here. What awesome part of you did this come from. This is honestly one of the best poems I've read in here in awhile...the idea, the layout, the word usage, the climax to the end, and the ending itself...all soooo well done...definately has my vote (and I can be a tough audience)...great job Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
That was incredible. I mean it. Most of the time, if a poems really long, I read it but I don't think too much about it. This I read word for word, intrigued the whole time. I think not including this in the book would be not only depriving the world of something amazing, but hurting it. That was honestly one I will remember and I think you really have talent in the way you wrote that. -othersideofthemirror |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
*sniffles* This poem caused a mix of emotions with me....Well done!  ^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^ |
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newguy04 Junior Member
since 2003-04-23
Posts 17ohio |
This poem is like a a page out of alot of teens lifes and i enjoyed readint it |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
wow really good. you either take one path or the other but either way they are both the same. robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men! |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Wow... thanks, everybody. |
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