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Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2003-04-30 03:41 AM

A Better Place

As if I were the pleasant dream
falling gently into my tired head,
I flutter away now into my sleep.
The world is nicer as I lie in bed.
I'm in a new place now;
one with all the bliss that can only be found
beyond the gates of reality
and beyond the conscious minds ability
to be free within itself.
As the innermost caves of myself
are releasing their desires upon my mind,
I begin to see it.
The blank canvas that the backs
of my eyelids provide
is now becoming the works of my minds art
that, for the night, will be my world.
Behest to my fears, my love, and my wants
is nocturnal power.
The power take me anywhere.
The power to keep me.
The power to...
Oh, damn..6:00 already.
Time to get up.

Jeremy Halstead

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

[This message has been edited by Jeremy Halstead (04-30-2003 06:56 PM).]

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2003-04-30 12:35 PM

Dontcha just hate it when a really cool dream goes out when daylight comes in?
a good write. I especially liked the eyelid canvas analogy.

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

2 posted 2003-04-30 06:47 PM

Seems as though we both have something in common: We dislike the rain.
I love the way this is done.!

^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^
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[This message has been edited by FlyingCloud (04-30-2003 06:48 PM).]

Eminem wanna be
Member

since 2003-02-04

Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri

3 posted 2003-04-30 11:36 PM

Lol flyingcloud....i really like that one and i know how that is

You can do anything you set your mind to man--EMIN3M
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punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

4 posted 2003-05-01 02:45 AM

oh oh oh oh i had this one dream and it was going good then i woke up and was like dang it! it was only a dream grrrrrrrrrrr!!! nice write hun!
robin

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2003-05-02 09:57 PM

"the blank canvas that the backs of my eyelids provide is now becomming the works of my minds art that for the night will become my world."...I loved this poem, I've read a lot of your poetry and I must say your talent is inspiring.
~Lexy

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