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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-04-27 08:52 PM

On the outside
a shield, a disguise
to hide the truth
from the oblivious
people around.

On the inside,
decayed and forgotten
lies a mind waiting
to explode but is trapped
behind the sewn mask.

On the outside,
it smiles and laughs
and plays along
like everything is fine
like its not dying inside.

On the inside,
its screaming of rage
of torment, of sacrifice,
of all things
its been put through in the past.

On the outside,
a life filled with friends
with people who think they know
the truth when in reality
they know so very, very little.

On the inside,
even a fragment of its pain
would be enough to cripple
the strongest thing out there
.....Love.....

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

[This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (04-27-2003 08:54 PM).]

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-27 09:17 PM

Jeez girl! This was REALLY good. Lots of emotion in it. Terrific write! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

2 posted 2003-04-27 11:06 PM

I really liked this one. A lot of my poems lately have had a similar theme to this... I can really relate. There was a lot of emotion in this. Great write, thanks for posting

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

3 posted 2003-04-27 11:37 PM

Great write!! The way you expressed yourself was just perfect. Good Job!

Sing'n Fool

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2003-04-28 07:13 PM

thanks, I'm glad you all liked this piece... I just wrote it the other day..but yeah..thanks again

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

5 posted 2003-04-29 07:40 PM

Woah, Stac...nice job!!! Really good. You had really good emotion. It was expressed beautifully...really awesome write. I love it!

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

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