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Through One Another's Eyes (not sure on title, does it fit?)
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Through One Another's Eyes (not sure on title, does it fit?) |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York 
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I don't remember when I wrote this but it's old I can tell by the ink and stuff...and the fact that I didn't recognize it when I was at work today...so here goes nothin'... ********************~***************** I look into your eyes beyond the walls of the present I see the past, the glowing star that never was rekindled. The memories of sparkling eyes, the light from one smile to the next. All glowing with happiness. All full of love and at peace with each other. I look into your eyes beyond the darkness of your pain. I see the light of a new memory. The memory of new love. The love of a strong friendship. The love no other person could offer. The memory of two people living a life of one through one another's eyes forever... *************************** ...I didn't already post this did I? |
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sing'n fool Member
since 2003-04-17
Posts 82Morris, Il |
Great job here! I think this is very well written! I really enjoyed the first line, and yes the title fits. You could also call it Beyond Your Eyes. That's just a suggestion though. I think that it's fine the way it is. Keep this good work comming! Sing'n Fool Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really really love this one!! Especially the 3rd stanza!! This just might be one of my favorites of yours. My vote of course! I hope you get this one in the book!! WinterWren |
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