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Teen Poetry #6

My Eternal Mystery

StephyBob07
Junior Member

since 2003-04-18

Posts 37
Texas

0 posted 2003-04-27 04:15 PM

You, Your eyes
I see the pain,
pain that you and I share.
Do you see in mine what I see in yours?

You, You feel,
You feel what I refuse to feel.
What I so long for.
How do you do it?

You, You know,
You know my dreams,
my deepest secrets which I never would release.
Will you believe in me?

Me, My life,
I know nothing of you,
but I know you are forever, eternal.
Who are you?

"...and poets are born knowing the language of angels." -Madeline L'Engle

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

1 posted 2003-04-27 05:11 PM

Not bad. It's simple... but it's interesting. I like it.

-cassi

StephyBob07
Junior Member

since 2003-04-18

Posts 37
Texas

2 posted 2003-04-27 05:23 PM

thanx. it is simple...the simplest one i've written. just thought i'd try something new.
~stephy

"...and poets are born knowing the language of angels." -Madeline L'Engle

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-04-27 07:59 PM

I like this one alot!
I like the way you formatted the first lines of each stanza.
Well done!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

4 posted 2003-04-27 08:05 PM

ooohhh, a mystery, I like it...so simple, yet intruiging. I guess the simplicity adds to the intruige....nice job.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

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