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Teen Poetry #6

Distorted Perfection

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-04-25 04:43 PM

Covered by mask,
my body warps.

Hands reach out,
from every direction.

I try to flee,
but am engulfed in flames.

The fires burn and twist,
my already tortured soul.

Inflicted misery in every crevice,
I cannot escape.

Now changed in a way,
so unimaginable.

The demons have turned me into,
something from a nightmare.

Completely forbidden,
to ever break free.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-25 05:24 PM

Good job! Mmm, I like this very much! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

2 posted 2003-04-26 12:38 PM

Nice job, dude!! This is an awesome poem. Too bad you didn't consider it for the book...this one would have made it! Nice write dude...really great!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

3 posted 2003-04-26 03:15 PM

YESSSS! I LIKE it! Awesome job.

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

4 posted 2003-04-26 04:04 PM

This is prolly one of my favorites of yours.

The imagery of this one reminded me of Dante's inferno and Paradise Lost. Not sure it that's what you were going for but that's what came of this in my mind.

Good write.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2003-04-26 10:10 PM

Thanks everyone, I'm glad you all liked it. Your thoughts are appreciated. There's a reason why I didn't submit this to be consider for the book, and that was b/c I already have one poem accepted, and thats good enough for me.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

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