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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2003-04-21 01:55 PM

In one moment you've become so weak
However hard I try, my strength can't be added to yours
Could you feel the pain in those tears I almost cried?
But I knew they would set off a flood,
And my eyes would never dry.
My heart cries in their stead,
It wails such a mournful sound.

Why is there nothing I can do to help?
If only there was something I could do to make you well
This sorrow would ease just knowing I'd tried
But all I can do is watch
As a heinous tsunami rises
Full of your sickness and suffering,
And the question of whether or not
You will live.

In one moment you hit the earth so hard,
And tore my world apart.
It seems just yesterday you were fine
And laughing with me.
It scares me so much to think that tomorrow
You might be taken away.
And always haunting me is that damnable question
Of whether or not
You will live.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

Paragon
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

1 posted 2003-04-21 03:05 PM

Good write

Peacebri
Junior Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 44

2 posted 2003-04-21 05:05 PM

I really like it, Its a great thought provoking poem and has so much meaning behind it.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-21 06:36 PM

I really like this. Good use of imagery and feeling. Nice job!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

4 posted 2003-04-22 02:22 PM

powerful, moving really a great write. I enjoyed reading it. I can't wait to see more of your work. keep up the good work!

Sing'n Fool

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

5 posted 2003-04-22 04:17 PM

Nice poem, it really made me think and it was very well written

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

6 posted 2003-04-22 10:16 PM

STEPH! *Wipes away the tears* Sweetie, this was....omg....I felt the emotions...I loved the second stanza...I loved the whole thing. This is definately library material. Dude, I apologize for not being around...problems of prohibited me from writing and stuff. Oh my God...Wow...I'm gonna read it over and over...Thanks for sharing and you know what, three songs just played that comply with your poem...making it more sentimental. Thank you!
-Kirah

I lie all the time - infact Im lieing right now!
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

7 posted 2003-04-22 10:36 PM

Thank you all for taking the time to read this and for your wonderful replies.
This poem is very important to me...
ALWAYS tell the people you love how you feel about them, they can be taken away from you so quickly.
Kirah, as always I love to read your comments.
Im SO glad you can feel the emotions that I put into this poem, that's very important to me.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

8 posted 2003-04-22 11:06 PM

You're welcome...*can't wait till she moves out of her house*...Father...God, sometimes I just want to ring his neck! Thanks to your poem...I'm able to right again...Thanks. I appreciate it. Though, my friends might not. Peace.

I lie all the time - infact Im lieing right now!
Today is yesterdays tomorrow.

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