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sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

0 posted 2003-04-19 02:36 AM

just a little buzzed here.This is just ramble.

What to Wright?

Conflicted and torn
on the words i should say.
It seems that a wall
always stands in the way.

Not knowing what's good.
Not knowing what's bad.
Trying to exspress to you
the emotions I have.

Deleting, and revising
every word that I say.
It seems that perfection
is so damn far away.

Too much correcting,
and far too revised.
Where do you stand,
is this right in your eyes?

M.P.D.

[This message has been edited by sing'n fool (04-19-2003 02:37 AM).]

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tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

1 posted 2003-04-19 07:37 AM

not bad for a "ramble". i enjoyed it. i like the rhyming scheme... jessy

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

2 posted 2003-04-19 09:28 AM

Same as the last reply, it's pretty good for 'rambling.' haha, good write! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-19 11:16 AM

Not bad for a 'ramble.' I like the rhyming scheme as well...nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

4 posted 2003-04-19 12:56 PM

this is the best I've seen of your's yet....great poem....really

J.H.

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

5 posted 2003-04-19 01:38 PM

I really like it. Wish my "rambles" were that good.

Jenni

You are what you make yourself to be.

Peacebri
Junior Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 44

6 posted 2003-04-19 11:03 PM

dang, for a "ramble" that was pretty good.

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