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dalainn New Member
since 2002-10-06
Posts 6 |
Special ------- She loves me for who I am. Constantly the same with no pretends. When I plummet and scrape my knees. She is forever nearby when in need. I can never replace this diamond. She struck me near a magical fountain. Special powers she bestowed. Into a man I learned to grow. |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Since you aren't asking for critiques, I can't exactly give it to you, but I will tell you I got tripped up over the rhyme... Ri ~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~ |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
hi! i know your new around here and i dont want you to take this the wrong way, but maybe you might like to add something to the poem, revise it a little. the thought is there but it falls short somewhere along the way, i was waiting for the puncher but it never came. im really sorry but i do hope you'd do better next time God i totally hate myself for saying this since i know how it feels like, its like killing babies(i meant the poems),pls dnt take this the wrong way, looking forward to your next post. anawnda |
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