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OpaqueView New Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 9North Carolina |
Inspired by my boyfriend...u know how someone can come into your life and just change everything around in the least amount of time...after u took your whole life to...well just read the poem... My slavery is of the mind, my closemindedness keeps me eternally confined. Presuaded to believe the inevidable,I was skeptical to believe everything,like the mind of a rebel. My established beliefs are not to be tampered with. It took my whole life to develop these morals and I will not drift. A strangers opinion will not taint my own judgement, years of being lied to has made me reluctant...submurged in disbelief.... Until this one mysterious being comes along and incorporates himself in my mind...deep...permanently...irreversibly. His thoughts slowly becomes mine...his innermost feelings are taking over me, got me blind, i can no longer see...my morals are now a part of my fictitious past...i`d never thought I`d let a stranger get the best of me...I hardly know who I am anymore...but wait...am I him? |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
I like this! What you were saying, can be true with many people. Sometimes it's bad but for you, it seems to be good! Keep writing! ~Jess  "The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept." |
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OpaqueView New Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 9North Carolina |
Yeah it kinda makes u think... Do I have the same effect on him? Am I really that weak? its kinda crazy...but thanks for the feedback |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
This isn't bad, quality wise. But the content makes me shudder. Don't ever believe that someone will be there forever, don't put so much faith in someone that they can hurt you, it's not worth it. Jenn "Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me." |
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OpaqueView New Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 9North Carolina |
oh dont worry... i dont believe anything like that... |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I really enjoyed reading this. I felt it the whole way through. You had a perfect usage of words...and the rhyming scheme was incredible. Absolutely fabulous! Too bad you didn't consider this for the book, it would have made it!!! But keep posting...I love your writing! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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karebear07 Member
since 2003-04-15
Posts 64Texas |
Wow someone who comes into your life can change it in a good way. I can relate so much. That was such a good poem keep writing. -Kara <>< |
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BabieDoll Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268BFE |
I really liked this poem. Good usage of words. When I read, I could actually envision this poem being a song...I heard a beat and everything. Good job. ~J.Lynn  "In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..." |
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