Teen Poetry #6 |
The Truth Outside |
Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
This my first new poem in at least a year, so be gentle, but be honest...thnx The Truth Outside I stare serenly through my living room door. I see how sunshine still beats there just as before. The flag outside my window boasts in the wind, while that kid on the street still laughs with his friend. I always had said that if you should leave, the world would stop and sacrifice me. In my new solitude, I'm clear with the truth. The world did not stop turning without you. The only one haulting here is myself. Life has gone on with non of my help. I've done my self in one day at a time. The world still turns. Too bad it's not mine. J.H. Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
I really liked this poem...very thought provoking and sentimental..the imagery was awesome..definately written from a kind heart...good job once again!! Jenn **It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not** |
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karebear07 Member
since 2003-04-15
Posts 64Texas |
That was awesome. Felt like it was saying that you moved on but yet you feel you haven't. That is the way i see it. Makes you think about moving on in life which is something good to do. -Karebear07 <>< Hidden in every poem is advise that can do alot. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Somehow I know this well.....This is really sad!!!! Good write though!!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Honey Member
since 2001-10-09
Posts 92Hot girl From Canada |
I really liked this one. the way you used you words were wonderful keep up the good work my dear |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
This is so good, I really liked the begging, I like the simple description of the kids laughing outside and the flag blowing in the wind, I really like the approach you took on this piece. Thanks for sharing, I really like your work.. ~Lexy |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I really liked this one, as I do all of your work. You had a really good usage of imagery. Nice job! You have my vote! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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