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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-04-13 11:47 PM

If you ever see him on the street
and, ny chance, he nods and stops to speak
If I happened to be metioned,
Please, answer in this way if you are questioned

If he askes how I am,
say 'wonderful with your memory
and lonely without your arms.'

If he askes how I look,
say 'beautiful full of life
you can only see her tears
when the light is right.'

If he askes if I'm seeing someone
say 'Only in her dreams.'
Then look him in the eye
and ask him these same things

When your through please tell him
'She stopped looking..after you
You were her dream come true.

You know stars don't always stay
in the sky
and a love so precious
should never be let by.'

But anyway..I'm on my way
I'll tell her you said..Hi

Post break up poems...arn't they great

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

1 posted 2003-04-14 06:27 PM

Well my computer is being stupid and not letting me edit my post so anyways, in the first stanza where it says "ny" that should be "by." that's all!
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

2 posted 2003-04-14 08:02 PM

Heeeey, I really enjoyed this one. It was sad, but it was kinda cute, too. In a weird sort of way... hehe I'd post the one breakup poem I have, but the content of it isn't appropriate for Passions. lol Thanks for posting!

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-04-15 02:19 PM

I really like the way this one was done.
I can just see that encounter on the street.
Love this poem!
Another for my library.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-04-15 04:50 PM

Sad but sweet--and I agree, you did paint the encounter very well. And hugs, on your notation of your inspiration. Go ahead and vent.

(I get downright nasty m'self...wicked me--

)

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

5 posted 2003-04-16 12:42 PM

Thank you guys for your replies. It is kinda sweet in a way..I don't know I guess I had just written so much depressing stuff about it that I had to get one out that was a little more light hearted yet still got what I was trying to say across, I'm glad you guys could see that.
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

6 posted 2003-04-16 05:25 PM

this was a really creative way to express your loneliness. there are so many ways to tell the story of missing someone... the whole "chance conversation" thought was a really different one...liked it alot.

J.H.

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

7 posted 2003-04-19 09:27 PM

This was a very good idea for a poem! The way you made it seem like a "per chance of conversation," was very cool. I've recently told this to someone to tell my ex. Very nice write. i really enjoyed this one.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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