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The Fall from Cloud9
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The Fall from Cloud9 |
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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
The constant yet, sporadic, patter of the rain seems to scatter my concentration and ease the pain In the beginning there was this euphoric elation but now I struggle in vain to maintain, to remain, to perservere In the beginning I was naive unable to hear the coming tragedy I didnt know then that you had come to conquer to desecrate what meant the most to me what I held sacred My thoughts My love My trust Now, Here I am lying on the floor in the rain trying hard to make myself overcome the pain lost in the wake of my mistakes so hard to breathe never had a chance... the puddles around me ripple in a rhythmic dance focus... Inhale... Exhale... I can feel the blood drain from my face as it pales all the time, wasted, in vain... time seems to slow nothing else matters the pain consumes if I could only wake from this dream I would change it all to avoid this fall |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow...this is one of the best things I've read in awhile. I don't really know how to compliment it because I don't think I can do it justice. I just thought it was very powerful and very beautifully worded. Amazing job! Kay The day you were born, you were born free |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
This was an awesome poem, trully from the heart!!! you appear to be a sweet person, with a kind heart, there should be more people in this world like you!!!!! The poem was amazing!! Jenn **It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not** |
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Paragon Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 114 |
Thanks for the replies, it really motivates me to continue putting my thoughts and emotions out there... Steven |
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