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Teen Poetry #6

Love, Life, Her

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

0 posted 2003-04-08 01:25 AM

Love
leaves too many scars
places my heart
behind so many bars

Life
for too many years
has brought pain
and too many tears

She
caused me so much pain
even so
I'd do it over again

Love
has done so much to me
leaving deep wounds
for eternity

Life
left too many scars
but the light in her eyes
twinkled like stars

Love
brought so many tears
for loves lost
and these burdensome fears

She
meant so much to me
and her smile
shines through my memory

-"Poet Nascitar, Non Fit"
-"A Poet Is Born, Not Made"

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-04-08 01:48 PM

smiling here, quite pretty, this is. And love remembered even through the pain is always worth the effort of recalling.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2003-04-08 06:52 PM

The last stanza is a nice touch,
it finishes the poem just right.
You have my vote for this one.
Hope everything heals up.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

3 posted 2003-04-09 04:32 PM

This reminds me of that song by Garth Brooks, the Dance.

It's very good I enjoyed reading this.

But lately I have been wondering, if a love lost really is better then never having loved at all.  I'm not sure anymore.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2003-04-09 05:01 PM

I really liked this poem, quite creative!!! You have a sweet heart and a burdened soul, I hope it all turns out alright!!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

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