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Trouble Breathing
Member

since 2002-11-12

Posts 63

0 posted 2003-04-07 04:17 AM

I see a shadow in your eyes
Of what used to be,
When everything you told were lies
Laced with false dreams and misery,

And I prayed to the skies,
That some day you’d see,
You were never really all that wise,
Just a pretender in disguise

And maybe it’s the weather,
Or maybe you’re just cold,
Your soul was as pure as your heart is black,
And once you’re gone, there’s no looking back

You were still no better off than you were once before,
Just curled up and left for a mess,
Never just another tile on my floor,
You were more than my damsel in distress.

But now that I know you,
I must confess,
You were never really the best,
Just more naïve than the rest

And maybe I shouldn’t have tried,
Or were you just completely dead inside?
Your life is as sad as your lies were bad,
But through it all, you were still the best I ever had

[This message has been edited by Trouble Breathing (04-07-2003 12:36 PM).]

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-04-07 09:31 AM

Whoa..I really liked this poem! Yes, I voted for it..hehe. Good write! ~Jess

"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding." -Nicholas Sparks

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-04-07 10:02 AM

Wow. I don't even know what else to say. Just wow.
Jenni

You are what you make yourself to be.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-07 05:50 PM

Nice Job...That's all I can say...Good write!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-04-07 07:56 PM

(big hugggssssss) And believe me, you will have much better soon for liars truly should be ashamed of themselves and no lie is beautiful! (sad sigh) I send many hugs your way, dearest friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-04-08 06:02 PM

I hope you get into the book with this one.
Perfect poem.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

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