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Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

0 posted 2003-04-03 03:52 PM

It's amazing how I shut down,
hold my breath and close my eyes
and still sense that you are gone
It's funny how you start to smile
and all at once I realize
we were so perfectly wrong for each other
So this is what you planned
You just never once let on
In your silence was the warning that you knew
I'd never take
And you knew that in the end, I'd be begging you
to fake one more hollow conversation.

Let me hear the lies
in your poetry one more time
So I can hate myself for pretending not to see
through every line and every word you had to say.
for pretending not to see a mile away
that you would tie me to the edge and turn to leave
Tied so tight, I can't move
so tight I can't breathe
This is what I was afraid of
but you mocked my fear and held me tighter
This is what you said would never happen
You are such a beautiful liar

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

Tabitha LeAnn
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 50
Kansas, USA

1 posted 2003-04-03 10:26 PM

WONDERFUL POEM!! IT SEEMED AS IF YOU PUT ALOT OF THOUGHT AND FEELING IN TO THIS POEM!! IT SEEMED SO TRUE. YOU HAVE MY VOTE!!!

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-04-05 03:48 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Believe me when I say this, no liar is ever beautiful! (sad sigh) Sometimes the lies can be hidden and it may feel like beauty, but when the truth comes out, all the beauty is gone as honesty is what makes true beauty strong! (sigh) This is very heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kandi, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

3 posted 2003-04-05 04:44 PM

very nice! ahh reminds me so much of someone i know... you write beautifully, i will definitly be looking for more of your work.
you've got my vote!

-Erica-

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

4 posted 2003-04-05 07:25 PM

That was a very beautiful poem reminding me of someone I once knew, you've got my vote

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

5 posted 2003-04-06 06:39 PM

Getting my vote

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

6 posted 2003-04-06 10:43 PM

Thanks for all the nice replies...they are so very appreciated!

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

7 posted 2003-04-07 05:47 PM

Very wonderful job! I can really feel where you're coming from. I love it! Nice work!

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

8 posted 2003-04-08 07:07 PM

The first few lines got me right into the poem, and the last line ended it just right.
My vote for this one, great job!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

9 posted 2003-04-12 09:21 PM

I really loved this poem got my vote

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

10 posted 2003-04-13 12:44 PM

Good, you have my vote.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

11 posted 2003-04-13 02:07 AM

I really related to this poem and I found it beautifully written.

I think this is one of the best I've read in a while. You definately have my vote hun! Keep on writing!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

12 posted 2003-04-16 02:56 PM

Hey Kandi!!! Long time, no read!! This was a really painful poem for you, I'm sure. You each ounce of you hurt and dissapointment and turn it into a wonderfuly sad story...very well done as usual.

J.H.

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.

karebear07
Member

since 2003-04-15

Posts 64
Texas

13 posted 2003-04-16 04:50 PM

That was so powerful. You really put feeling into it and It was like you truly meant it!! you have my vote!!!
-Kara

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