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straindmind
New Member
since 2003-03-24
Posts 9
MI, usa

0 posted 2003-03-31 01:31 PM


The Big Guy
By a.j.

Out of breath
out of sight
nowhere to run
I've heard them all
Your dumb
Your retarded
Your fat
Your not cool
Am I you?
Am I them?
I don't care
Never speak
Never stay
Never leave
Here today
You're gone tomorrow

© Copyright 2003 a.j. - All Rights Reserved
SilentFreija
Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 37

1 posted 2003-03-31 02:38 PM


told you I was a fan. I love your writing. It's individual and awesome.

Where you look for broken hearts...you'll find me...
mend my broken heart and love me
because I forget how to smile.

NSnaomian
Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
2 posted 2003-03-31 11:14 PM


You did well on this, except in the middle you seem to be using the wrong spelling of you're...but that is quite alright, all it needs is a revision and you are set.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

SweetGhettoFlurt
Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 15
Milw,WI
3 posted 2003-04-02 09:35 AM


Thiz wuz a real kewl poem. I liked it alot.

*~*SweetGhettoFlurt@aol.com*~*Marie*~*

straindmind
New Member
since 2003-03-24
Posts 9
MI, usa
4 posted 2003-04-02 12:04 PM


i love to hear from anyone. i'm still getting used to this site, so any tips or hints a definately welcome! thank you all for YOUR support!

                    -a.j.

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