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HardHitter
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0 posted 2003-03-30 10:43 PM


The essence of beauty flows elegantly,
while the chill air breezes hastily.
A view of fireworks blowing in the ocean,
soothes the soul of a man with a love potion.
The new dew of the day, drips off the freshman leaves,
like a loose faucet, water dripping like a tease.
The sweet aroma of the blowing ground,
opens the eyes more to see what’s around.
The crystal reflections can even make the blind see,
this is the place I go, only me.
My feet are massaged after every step,
as the view of my ideal paradise is kept.
The soothing steps of Neptune, is all you need to take in,
to know the place where you need to begin.
Echoing songs by flying gods fill the air,
taking it all in, nothing else to care.
Out in the open, yet hidden from the world,
don’t need to think about anything, my minds whirled.
The sky is on fire, while the day awakens from night,
shedding light on this beautiful place in sight.

[This message has been edited by HardHitter (03-31-2003 12:59 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-31 12:12 PM


Wow! A true nature lover!..I loved the imagery and emtions weaved within these words, I had a long hard day and was feeling pretty out of sorts and this just cheered me right up and gave my a warm glowing feeling thank you.
~Live and Laugh~

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
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2 posted 2003-03-31 06:41 AM


Hi,

I really enjoyed this poem... The flow of it rythmically was slow, and soothing... Did you think about that when you wrote it? That was really well done... The rythm of it so closely followed the words... Lovely!

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HardHitter
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3 posted 2003-03-31 08:31 PM


Thanks.  This poem was actually an English project.  We had to write a poem about our favorite place.  Obviously, it is a nice beach.  Glad my poem could cheer you guys up.
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