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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-03-29 03:14 AM

Something I wrote today.  Just sat down in one of my classes and this is what I came up with.  Not my best work, but not my worst.  Let me know what you think!

SHORTFALLING

I know sometimes I fall short
I turn back to the world as a last resort
When I get lost and start to feel
As if I were alone, as if You’re not real

But I know Your love
And the heavens up above
I try to live my life for You
Sometimes that is hard to do

In this life I know I do wrong
I have followed the world way too long
Here I am, Lord, use me for good
Help me to be the man I should

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (03-29-2003 03:36 PM).]

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

1 posted 2003-03-29 01:19 PM

I'm assuming the last word should be should...(it came out as sh on my screen.)
I liked this very much, and no its definitely not one of your worst...
Though you don't seem to have many of those.

Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

tornskirt
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

2 posted 2003-03-30 11:26 PM

wow, i thought it was very good.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-04-04 03:59 PM

I liked that one, my favorite lines were:

"I know sometimes I fall short
I turn back to the world as a last resort"

I thought it was a really good opening to the poem.

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-04-05 02:28 PM

Cody~
I know I've said it before, but I love how open you
are in not being afraid to write about your faith.
This is a wonderful expression of your faith, and
it's FAR from a 'worst' write from you.
As a matter of fact, it's one of my favorites.
Beautifully written, Cody.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (04-05-2003 02:29 PM).]

snoduck
Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 99
Selah, WA

5 posted 2003-04-05 04:23 PM

cody, cody, cody, jeez how many poems do you write in Hahn's class? lol, this is very good, and like vicky said a great expression of your faith. sometimes it's good to know that there are always people who believe... that may save the world some day... lol.
anyways nice write, i'm glad you shared that with us.

-Erica-

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