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Her Name is Love
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Her Name is Love |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
The smell of blood Hanging in the air Look at the serpents Running through her hair Do you see the darkness Deep within her eyes Can you feel the hunger That’s beneath the lies Can you hear her heart Coursing with the blood Once she has her start Emotions form a flood The blood within her veins Is not her blood at all It’s the blood of those in chains And the blood of those who fall She whispers in your dreams Feeds while your sleeping No one hears the screams Because at night she does her creeping This is the story of a creature Whose appearance is beguiling Her most potent weapon Shows when she’s smiling |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Good poem, kinda confuesed though,  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Oh man I loved this! Haven't read any of your work before, I'll be looking for more. This was awesome to read I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very eerie..I like it.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Wow, this got me to the edge of my seat, I can't decide if this is more ecstatic or saddening! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet friend, I enjoy this very much, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tony, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This one burns of lust and hate. I love it.  |
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Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
WOW!! This poem was amazing. It really made me think about what it was saying. I will be sure to look for more of your work. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
this poem actually wasn't depressing. here i was all depressed already so i was like 'might as well read some tony poetry' but it was actually pretty neat. the last lines were my favorite, good job *thumbs up* b no one can make you feel inferior, unless you let them.--eleanor roosevelt |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
this is really good. it takes something normally made out to be nothing but "sweet" and made it darker without taking away the feeling. very good. the only thing i would change is the last line of the second stanza. I think it would flow better if it said someting like, "that hides beneath the lies." the extra syllable would improver it i think. hope i helped. Jenn don't ever let others tell you who you are |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was an amazing poem Tony, has my vote. very dark.... Regina "Despite all my rage I am still just a rat in a cage, Then someone will say what is lost can never be saved" |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Wow, I loved this. It was dark and yet, in the last stanza you made it alright. Describing the word love is a hard thing to do, but I think you did it well. Got my vote. Riley Windows stained with the fog, words written in by a girl. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very unusual one... Good work. Jenn "Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me." |
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MissKlarmic Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 70Canada,N.S |
nice write very niec indeed |
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