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HeroicVillan Junior Member
since 2002-11-09
Posts 34Lost..... |
who i am is not me what i am you cant see want to let me be free but i know it cant be wouldn't be accepted can only be rejected the fear and the rage beat against this cage its not what i feel this face isn't real a mask that i wear is ready to tear i can accept my crown i wont let me down i can be what i am no longer a scam the real me is out never had a doubt... |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
Very good! My favorite lines are: The fear and the rage beat against this cage It's not what I feel This face isn't real |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I enjoyed the poem, except for some of the rhyming, it seemed a tad forced, but that's just me. anyways. i liked the idea of the poem. Keep writing. Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I enjoyed this as well! Good write. My favorite lines would have to be: wouldn't be accepted can only be rejected Don't know why, they just are! Nice poem!  XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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