Teen Poetry #6 |
The Field of Broken Dreams |
CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
I sit alone and think In the field of broken dreams Sorting through broken promises Ripped at the seams I sit and I wonder About the trials of life We waste so much time Feeling hurtful pain and strife I try to brush away the tears From my heavy heart It's so hard to keep going When you don't know where to start I run around in circles Do I stop or do I begin In the field of broken dreams It's a race you never win People come and people go But I stay here just the same Those people will not save me For it's me they have to blame Once again I'm all alone Sitting in the rain In the field of broken dreams Lost with all my pain |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I absolutely loved this poem! Great work. We definitely do waste too much time with all the pain in life. Time to live more and have less worries! Loved the poem! You have my vote. XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
This was beautiful! Wow, I can relate to it so much. A truly wonderful poem, PERFECT! WinterWren |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) This is a very heartwrenching write, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way to ease your heart! (sad sigh) You always write with heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much, you have my vote! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
Thank you all for your replies. I'm glad you enjoyed it! |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
your poem has much sadness in it, yet I can see rays of hope also. I like it very much. Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lovely~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
That was an awesome poem!!! I really really liked it....such harmony...and the feelings were well expressed..good job...you have a kind heart... Jenn **Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life** |
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pearl6884 Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 72California coast |
I liked this...Very heartfelt and true... *applause* *To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...* |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I liked this sad poem very much... great job! *S* |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
That was a very thoughtful poem that really expressed your feelings well. ~*~Karen~*~ |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I liked this alot. good job. If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
CSwtThng~ This is a beautifully written piece. I enjoyed the message and the read. Very nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very good write....I'm voting!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
very good got my vote Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Good write, I liked it. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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karebear07 Member
since 2003-04-15
Posts 64Texas |
That truly spoken. I really enjoyed that because i can relate alot to the beutiful words you wrote. -kara |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I really like this one. I felt it the whole way through. I think everyone has that feeling every now and again...beautiful job. It's got my vote! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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Peacebri Junior Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 44 |
I love this, I thought about it alot and feel like I am you in this poem. Great job, you have a gift, please dont ever stop using it |
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