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Momentary Bliss-the angels call
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Momentary Bliss-the angels call |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey everyone, this one doesn't make a whole lot of sense unless you sit and think about it for a while..And I'm not sure it even makes sense then, but I think that's why I like it so much! Comments are always appreciated! The wind hits me softly As I stand at the waters edge Thinking of days and nights gone by And feelings left unsaid Quietly the water laps Against the sun kissed sand Reflecting its gentle turbulence Against a chaotic land The aqua water cleanses the mind And heals the troubled soul Where literal no longer makes sense And incoherent expression makes you whole Silent things have become As if seen though a mirrored glass Philosophy construed, turned inside out Dusty seasons left to pass Fluidity of motion Like the delicate wings of a dove Show grace of majestic beauty Imagined in those we love Problems go to heaven Solutions go to hell Wronged was a world perfectly right The first night darkness fell So through the imagined picture we see Distant lands afar Left to bleed in symphonic misery Imploded like a blown out star But for a moment of space A subject of time allotted to me The weight of the world is lifted And for a second I am free People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. ~Bella~ |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
this is simply beautiful. the imagery is awesome and it really made me think. it has my vote. Jenn |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) You're right, and it's never supposed to make any sense until you think it over, Siddhartha thought everything over for so long and that is how he became enlightened when he unraveled the spirit of Ohm from the river! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is beautiful, it has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Bella, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Thank you guys for replying and thanks for voting for it. I liked this one a lot so I'm glad to see that I wasn't completely in the wrong about it being good and that other people actually like it too! I feel that it is one of the better one's I've written lately so thank you for our comments. ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Enjoyed this very much! Gets my vote! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
this is such a gorgeous poem! the first lines... "The wind hits me softly As I stand at the waters edge Thinking of days and nights gone by And feelings left unsaid" They are definitely my favorite, great imagery and everything! Get's my vote as well! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
This most definitly gets my vote, it is such a vivid and beautiful piece! I love it! WinterWren |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Thank you guys! As always I love hearing what you have to say and enjoy the comments on my work. I'm glad to see that I did capture the image that I intended on capturing, thank you for voting for me! ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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