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scarlet fire
New Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 2

0 posted 2003-03-08 12:05 PM

No Chance

Slowly drowning
Myself in these tears
I think of you,
For what seems like years
I know you left,
To get away
You said it was just
That I was too young.
Without a chance
I knew we were through
Couldn’t bear it ending
Without a fight,
But now
I cannot find you.
You didn’t even know me
Am I just cursed?
What did I do..
All I thought I did
Was ever try to love you

hey. sorry. im new at poetry. i dont know anything. suggest anything for me. thanks.

[This message has been edited by scarlet fire (03-08-2003 01:48 PM).]

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2003-03-08 07:50 AM

Welcome to Passions!

It's always nice to see a new face around here, especially one that types in pink!

The piece itself is pretty well written and it details your pain adequately enough. If you're new to poetry the best way to improve is to keep on writing. We only get better through constantly putting our thoughts down on paper.

I look forward to seeing you around the forums but please remember to reply as well as post. This place is a community and doesn't work if people only post.

~AF~

"Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

2 posted 2003-03-08 05:12 PM

First of all, welcome to PIP. This was a good first post, I hope to see more from you.

Jenn

think about this: everyone you know will someday die.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-03-08 11:44 PM

Scarlett - welcome to PIP - this was heartwrenching - lovely writing - keep posting xxoo

Eminem wanna be
Member

since 2003-02-04

Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri

4 posted 2003-03-09 12:53 PM

hey that was good! and welcome to pip. I can really relate to that poem....good job again

~Crystal

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-03-09 01:29 PM

scarlet fire~
Great job of expressing your feelings in this piece.
As anonymousfemale said, keep writing. You're off
to a good start.
Welcome to Passions!
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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