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Dimming Light |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind 
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I'm going I'm going To a place unknown. So much fear (I'm scared) So much fear That I want the clock To stop And live on present...forever. I'm going I'm going But I'm afraid (I'm scared) That my lamp that Taking care of my soul Will go dim, Dimmer, and dimmer each day. Faith (what it is?) Faith (where it's from?) Would I... Ever find it... I'm going I'm going But I'm lack of faith (I fear...) I fear that I've to stand alone. So alone that I cry... Cry... (what a tear is worth?) Cry... (does anybody care?) Care about somebody outside their folks, Nuture her out of their needs... I'm going I'm going But I'm nobody without my folks. (I'm a nobody) A nobody outside my shelter... I'm frighten that That someday I need to stand... Stand alone, depend on no one else... Stand... Stand alone... ~Every girl has a dream within. [This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (03-07-2003 04:55 PM).] |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Other than a few minor spelling mistakes that was great  It was very sad and touching My favorite lines were "I'm frighten that That someday I need to stand... Stand alone, depend on no one else..." Those lines I though were really well written and very thoughtful Good write and read ~*~Karen~*~ |
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