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Teen Poetry #6

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BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

0 posted 2003-03-06 06:51 PM

Eternal darkness
Covers my soul
No light to guide me
I am lost
Wandering...
Waiting for the moment
When I will be saved
From the torment I face
It is unbearable
Life as I know it
Is now over
Lying sprawled on the floor
I feel dead to the world
So many empty promises
So much hidden pain
I tell myself
Don’t feel the hurt!
Don’t taste the fear!
Be strong!
Just push it back
Try to let go
Find the light... *

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2003-03-06 08:03 PM

good jenn...very good...

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

2 posted 2003-03-06 09:13 PM

That's an awesome poem, it was so well written and emotional

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-03-06 09:21 PM

What a beautiful, sad poem.
I could've written it myself, I feel like that so often.
I especially loved and can relate to the lines, "I feel dead to the world, so many empty promises, so much hidden pain."
Great job!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

4 posted 2003-03-08 05:47 PM

very well written, the emotions are expressed in a way that they come thru but aren't like all up in your face. nice name btw, lol.

-Jennifer Lynn-

think about this: everyone you know will someday die.

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