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CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-03-05 07:14 PM


Hey!  It's finals week, so ya know what that means?  2 hour block periods!  A test to do in that 2 hours leaves about an hour and a half to do nothing but write stupid poems, so let me know what you think about this one!  

TEARS AND BEARDS

Nobody here will kick you
In the rear as long as you
Adhere to keeping it in gear
As many times in the year
As it might appear, dear.
And as long as you don't
Drink beer in the atmosphere
With a deer and a peer,
Everything will be okay
In the final frontier, pioneer.
Do you hear?
If you don't, I'll volunteer
To shed a tear...
It may not be sincere
But I don't want a single sneer
From anybody here even if
It's out of sheer fear.
Every puppeteer in the Southern Hemisphere
Who cries a tear
Might have their make-up smear.
That would be weird if
Those puppeteers each had a beard
And had make-up smear
Yet I'd be the first to volunteer
To wipe clear that beard
Where their make-up smeared

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  


[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (03-05-2003 07:34 PM).]

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NSnaomian
Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
1 posted 2003-03-05 08:55 PM


AAAHHhhhhhhh! All that rhyming!!!
You did splendidly, though it was hard to keep up with.
"Those puppeteers each had a beard
And had make-up smear
Yet I'd be the first to volunteer
To wipe clear that beard
Where their make-up smeared"
The ending would have to be my favorite part...
Very cute and the time was worth it I found it enjoyable.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

frolicking dolphin
Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
2 posted 2003-03-06 03:10 PM


While I do think the rhyming makes the poem a little harder to understand I think it made it more fun to read,  I really like the poem and the wording used. Nice write

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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