Teen Poetry #6 |
The Shing Sea |
Ree Ree Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 56providence, RI |
It seems that none of my dreams come true, and i really don't know why. Instead, now, i seek the past for pain and cozy insecurity. Warm and Comfy. Knowing, all the while, where i stand and caring very little. Being imperfect, my crime, is all i've ever known. And now, caught red handed, i am left here, for a crime you too commit, Everyday blatantly, without seeing This conflict; your denial vs. My acceptance, Which i beleive is what pulled us apart. Under these layers of superficiality lies your dependence on your own lies to who you wish you were. who, i beleive, you could and may be. Maybe. Someday. Just not here, not now. This place can't serve you understanding. only meatloaf, unbuttered, unsalted corn, and perhaps a fruit cup. Even these you'll firmly turn away. I can't feed you acceptance, that's not my life. So what IS left is my acceptance of your denial and hopefully some day your acceptance of this place. |
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Chloey Member
since 2002-09-29
Posts 74in a silver mustang convertible |
Great write and read! *Chloey* I write what I feel and I feel what I write. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Nicely done! It soesn't have a real ryhme scheme to it but it still flows well. A suggestion I would make would be to work on the flowing a little more. I like the metaphors used and it was an enjpyable read! ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Very nice poem, made me think. Good write ~*~Karen~*~ |
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