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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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0 posted 2003-03-05 01:42 PM


"Free"
(05/03/03)
Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

There's tip-toe footsteps in the hall,
With a bag and a baby she pulls out of the drive.
Stops at an all night mini-mall,
Got suplies, bruises to hide and alibies to write.
She can still feel his raised right hand,
Late night screaming, broken glass a wound grabbing for salt...

SHE WANTS TO BE FREE,
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE,
FROM MONSTERS IN HER HEAD
AND ALL HIS CONSTANT THREATS.
SHE WANTS TO BE FREE,
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE.
WANTS A BETTER WORLD,
FOR HER LITTLE GIRL.
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE...

Baby's crying in the backseat,
Can't risk the chance by stopping got to keep moving on.
Soon they'll both need a place to sleep,
Gets off at the next exit been on the run since dawn.
Dirty bed and no hot water,
Two dollar motel rooms is not her style but GOOD ENOUGH...

SHE WANTS TO BE FREE,
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE,
FROM MONSTERS IN HER HEAD
AND ALL HIS CONSTANT THREATS.
SHE WANTS TO BE FREE,
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE.
WANTS A BETTER WORLD,
FOR HER LITTLE GIRL.
JUST WANTS TO BE FREE...

© Copyright 2003 Brian Eggertsen - All Rights Reserved
PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
Posts 186
California, USA
1 posted 2003-03-05 02:07 PM


This was awesome! It was sad, but I loved it so much! Good work! Very nice for sure!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
2 posted 2003-03-06 03:12 PM


That was a very nice poem, touching and very sad, but very well written.  Nice work

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
Posts 419

3 posted 2003-03-06 06:03 PM


Thank you for you replies, didn't know how well, this would go with people here. But I guess until now ut's done well. SO thanks again and glad you liked it...

Best Wishes,

Brian.

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