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lauren03 Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 64oh, usa |
My life is so confusing my days are always so hectic I'm pulled here I'm pulled there My daddy's sick and I don't know when he'll be better all because of a stupid mosquito Two big days are fast approaching prom and graduation but will he be there? my friend, the one I love is not here, he left my side and all I hear is dear just be my friend I still need you here blocking out a love that still exists is never easy and then the one I lost him over plays with me even more he's truly my closest friend and some times I want so much more everyday he changes, different signs I get confuses my mind even more I tell myself its not like that and then he asks what is wrong no I can't tell you I say for I know it's not that way the one I tell everything to I cannot tell you this for I have once before this is all I can say, my daddy's sick and I don't know when he'll be home the one I loned my heart to has left it alone and the one I truly wish I could be with can never exist................ |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This is a good write and there are deffinately some nice ideas although you may like to consider entering some punctuation in there somewhere, it just makes it easier to read. But other than that, the images are quite nice and they are realistic which is always good. It's always nice to have themes you can relate to easily. Good Work. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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