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SCREAMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton 
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Have you ever been so angry, You just wanted to SCREAM? Have you ever woke up and felt nothing? Nothing, Nothing, Yes nothing, I feel nothing, It will always be this way. I'll wake up and SCREAMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM, Liveing my life as someone elses Dreams. ~*Azi*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes, I have...but then I did feel something, and slowly life changed....this packs a punch for sure!  |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
oh i loved that scream. it felt so good to read. as if i had screamed it myself. just as sea said, this packs a good whallop. sea said sea said by the sea shore... har har har. /jen/ i just haven't been the same since that house fell on my sister. |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Nothing. Nothing. I feel nothing... YES, I have felt that way... not when I woke up, rather, when I came home from a hard day... sat down and wondered about things, really. Or when I was really little and I would walk home from sleepovers because the other kids would be bugging me, I would think exactly that! "I feel nothing." And I wouldn't cry, I would just go home. Yes, I can relate to this quite a bit. it's good to let it all loose, though, with a nice hearty scream. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
Just to echo what the others have said really, this is a great transcription of those feelings, very easy to relate to, well done I enjoyed reading this Anya |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
When I draw out words like that, I extend the vowels, not the consonants. Words like that should sound..right..when they're said aloud. Screammmmm sounds silly. Just a suggestion.Onto the piece itself...been there. Felt that..err..didn't feel. It'll always go back to being that way, but the spaces in between aren't necessarily so empty... ~Carly "My own eyes are not enough for me; I will see through a thousand and yet remain myself..." ~C.S. Lewis [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (10-02-2002 10:06 AM).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Still feel nothing. nice piece. I have nothing more to say. ~AF~ "It is far more difficult to murder a phantom than a reality." - Virginia Woolf |
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Chloey Member
since 2002-09-29
Posts 74in a silver mustang convertible |
you have given me the urge to scream so here goes................................. SSSSSSSSSSCCCCCCCCCCRRRRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!! thanx i feel so relieved, *$*Chloey*$* Revenge is sweet |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i'm just adding that i really do agree with carly. i never really paid much attention to that before, but since she pointed it out, it really sticks out to me. i think you should draw out the vowels as opposed to the consonants. just another thought.  /jenstillnotgettingsickofthecatyet/ i just haven't been the same since that house fell on my sister. [the closest thing i've found to heaven is sitting here talking to you.bif naked] [This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-03-2002 10:07 PM).] |
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