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Teen Poetry #6

Red hot fire in confusion

Jenn Cirrincione

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0 posted 2003-02-25 08:16 AM

Venting...just some idle venting here, don't mind me.

Ouch.
Well, gee that stung.
You ask of me this feeling,
oh so pure and true..
You seem to feel the same way,
and to me you'd pay any dues.
Now you stupid ass-
have all your heart strings
broken?
They just can't be pulled,
and just won't budge-
and you think you've won me.
For so long I sat in wonder-
but you did promise me the world.
So I let down the wall
and yanked you in,
and built in back around US.
Suddenly, your heart beats fast-
but perhaps out of anxiety.
For what you've always wished,
is here right now;
will you really throw it back?
Think real hard before you go-
because I can't be sure,
the wall will be as weak this time;
and tumble over still.
Because if you leave,
be assured of this:
I'll turn it into steel.
Anytime you feel the need,
I'll have flown away.
I won't be at your beckon call,
I'll be gone-
just deal.
Traitor.

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (02-25-2003 10:22 AM).]

frolicking dolphin
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1 posted 2003-02-25 03:01 PM

All the words I wished that I could say, nice work.

Karen

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2 posted 2003-04-10 12:06 PM

Nice vent, brilliant poem. I really enjoyed this, it is filled with hostility and emotion and it feels so alive. I hope things are ok?. Anyway thanks for sharing this

Jenn Cirrincione

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3 posted 2003-04-10 10:27 PM

Thanks everyone.

Yeah, I wrote this out of sheer frustration and confusion. Emotion and love are tough things.

Jenn

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

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